Eugh.

Alright that was pretty uninspired.

We have two breaks, a piano, and some string instrument. Kind of a small selection, with a few weird vocal bits tossed in.

The song presents a pretty disjointed mood with the unfitting combination of tones from each instrument or sample.

Short, little to no buildup, and boring.

Here's a piece that uses similar elements, but in a much better way.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=J05v1v 0Teuc

But really, keep working on it.

Mediocre

Alright, drums are extremely uninspired and repetitive. Synths all sound like generic presets, regardless of origin. The intro is very generic and boring. Buildups were weak, drops were even weaker. Boring synth melody in the middle only detracted from the song. Very little differentiation in the main melody.

Mastering is spot on, and although the song was mediocre, quality was pretty consistent throughout.

Listen to some stuff by Unknown Error, Spor, John B, SPL, Hive, Audio, Evol Intent, and Cujo.